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Nicky held his breath. He heard a voice, her voice, but it was surreal at the same time. Forgetting about the tray of food splattered over his carpet, Nicky walked in a trance towards the door. He heard the voice again and swung the door wide open.

The figure turned her head and looked up in surprise. Nicky felt the moment froze as his eyes caught her doe-like eyes. When was the last time they looked directly at each other? Nicky felt his heart twang at the connection he had sorely missed.

"Didn't think you'd come," He said dryly, hiding his rapidly rising emotions.

"Well, I did." The red-head replied plainly.

They stood in an eternity of silence. Nicky wanted to embrace her in a hug, but decided against it. The last time he bore his feelings, Dawn had shut away from him. Nicky didn't want to risk that now when she had willingly appeared at his door. He nodded his head and heavily whispered "I'm glad."

He turned and walked into his room, knowing that Dawn would follow him inside as was their habit. Nicky realized two things immediately: the first was that he didn't have a shirt on, and the second was that the stain on his handmade-Bohemian carpet was quickly expanding.

Instinctively, Nicky lowered his body over the split food, being careful to kneel down to reduce any strain to his injured rib cage. His heart leaped when he saw Dawn doing the same, sitting only a foot away from him. As they picked up the food, Nicky's mind reeled from their close distance. He was overjoyed at her presence but knew that their severed relationship needed mending first.

"Rylie gave this to me." The blonde man spoke the first thing that came to his mind. He was pleasantly surprised when Dawn eased into the topic casually. The awkward tension rapidly faded away as they warmly talked and even teased each other. A bubbly feeling swelled up inside Nicky. He wanted no more than the moments to last.

He chuckled to himself when Dawn got up to grab a washcloth from his restroom. The girl knew where everything was in his apartment, as if she was living there herself. Nicky restrained his thoughts from growing wilder - he knew that reality was far from his glimmer of hope.

Instead, he thanked her for helping out. "I'd try doing it myself," said Nicky, "but this hand is useless for now."

"That's a lame excuse, Nick." Dawn said with a smile, which made Nicky grinned from ear-to-ear.

"You're right; I would have just called McSneed to do it for me."

She must have found that funny, because her red waves bounced off her shoulders as she chuckled, a sight Nicky was delighted to witness.  Dawn then bent her head down to scrub the mess, allowing Nicky to gaze over the full length of her fiery curls that enveloped her slender form.

He noticed that she didn't bind her hair: the mess of ringlets were left free and exposed, most probably because she had just gotten out of the shower. He was tempted to bend and took a whiff, but knew the move would be idiotic. Nicky continued staring into the red waves that he had yearned to wake up next to. Was it possible that he had actually memorized each curl of her fiery hair? After all, he knew each slope of her body, each sculpture of her perfectly-carved face. He had imagined different ministrations he would do with her, to her.

As if she had listened to his thoughts, she looked up to his face. Nicky quickly casted his eyes away; he was pretty sure they were swimming in thoughts of lust. Dawn silently got up to return his washcloth to the restroom, an angle which allowed Nicky to see her burning-red cheeks. A crushing wave of happiness and fervor overwhelmed Nicky and ignited a moment of clarity. It became clear to him that she must have liked him too. Her visit was not needed, yet she came. And now her body language was speaking for her. Nicky's glimmer of hope brightened, and he was adamant to make Dawn admit to her feelings.

"So, are you doing okay?" The red-head piped up when she came back. Her eyes shied away from his and she kept her distance.

"Yeah," Nicky lied. He ignored his Rylie-shaped conscience that was nagging about getting more rest. Nicky made sure that his answer was close-ended, in which he was free to confront her.

"So, what now?" He started his move slowly. He had to play it right. Dawn was in a close state to being vulnerable. The girl took a step back as Nicky walked towards her.

"I should go," her voice wavered. Nicky bored his eyes into hers, and he instinctively knew that she was not going to leave. Not on his watch anyway. He murmured something as he took another step towards her. Nicky watched Dawn's eyelids fluttered across his body and an uninhibited wanton surge rose inside of him. He lifted both his arms and caged her against the wall.

"Nicky…" He heard her moan his name, and Nicky almost lost it. His blood raged and his arms prickled with racing goose bumps. His body became sensitive to the cold and the exposure, and Nicky imagined warming it against hers.

'Take it slow.' A voice inside of him screeched, and Nicky knew it was best. He had to make her show she wanted it as much as he did.

Bending towards her right ear, he whispered huskily "I miss us."

Nicky felt pleased with the results. She relaxed her stiffened posture and slightly shifted inwards to him. Nicky took the advantage to inhale her scent. Her hair was like a freshly-picked fruit on a summer's day – the kind you want to devour as soon as you take a whiff. Nicky restrained himself.

She muttered something inaudible, but he did not pay attention. She was standing underneath him, and that was all that mattered. Her inflamed hair shook seductively, her rosy skin tugged at his heartstrings and her sand-brown eyes danced in anticipation of his next move. Nicky twirled a snake of red hair with one finger and traced the skin exposed on her right arm. Her eyelids battered at the touch, and Nicky was certain she felt the sensitive jolts that were racing across his skin too.

This is it, this is the moment. Dawn was vulnerable, and he was sure of her feelings. Nicky was about to swoop and capture her pink cushion-like lips, when Dawn suddenly swatted his hands away.

"I said don't" She hissed. She tried to push through the barrier he had held. What was she thinking? Nicky held strong.
OMG WHAT HAPPENS NEXT??!

I told you it would be a huge cliff-hanger. But hey, you guys can tell me what you think should happen, and when I pick up to continue this story, I might incorporate one or two ideas. In fact, you can draw/write/poem about what should happen and link it to me.

But... the two doing 'it' is not an option I would choose as an ending. Really.


Thanks to all who are supporting my efforts to write, and wishing me well. I wish you all the same and even more. :tighthug:

See ya in two weeks! (At least I'll try to stay away, haha)

Nicky & Dawn (c) WATCHERS
WATCHERS (c) *kai-isolated & *nixcoo
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NanzzyRulezz Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2011  Student General Artist
Yay for Nicky <3 I loved the story :D

Butbutbut... Didn't Dawn's side of the story get some kind of closure already? D: Cos then this wouldn't really be a cliffhanger |D
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nixcoo Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2011   Writer
That's true, that Dawn's story had a closure - and would be what I would stick with if this story gets into the real storyline.

I was just playing around with Nicky's POV coz that picture was just soo steamy :blush:
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NanzzyRulezz Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2011  Student General Artist
Haha, true :blush: And it was nice to also see it from Nicky's perspective <3
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VimmyOtto Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2011
I would sooooo write an ending too, only I'd feel like I was emulating something way better. It'd feel like writing fanfiction ^^; (Not putting down those that do, but I never could. Some weird sense of squeamishness.)
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nixcoo Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2011   Writer
Hahah! No worries, I highly appreciate that you enjoyed the story :D

I heartily agree with you about fanfiction - I can't write it, or I can't bring myself to write about it becuz I feel like it's someone else's finished work, and that's how it should stay. But I do LOVE well-written fanfics though! :D
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kai-choo Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
dammit just let them sleep together already!


LOLOLOLOLOLOLOL
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nixcoo Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011   Writer
Noooooo sleeping together yet! Shusshhh!! Hehehe.
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Moonycat Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
*_* That is awesome!!
Sorry I read it this late but... *_*
I love your story and Nicky and Dawn really are a great match :D
You did something great with inventing them :3
Great story, great language :)
Just Amazing :3
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nixcoo Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011   Writer
Awwwwww, thanks for such kind words. I'm happy you find Dawny a fitting couple - I myself am wondering how Dawn can ever put up with such a handful like Nicky. Hahah!
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Moonycat Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
well, she grew up with a lot of brothers,
didn't she? (if i remember it correctly xD)
So, Nicky shouldn't be too much for her to handle ;)
But i love how you write your stories *_*
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Tsurtsurel12 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2011
What's gonna happen ? I'm telling you what's gonna happen !
They'll be interrupted by the famous janitor,McSneed.
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nixcoo Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011   Writer
Hmm, McSneed interuppting them eh? But they're in such a romantic mood scene..! Wouldn't tat break the spell? *orders you to think some more*

Thanks for reading btw! I hope you enjoyed it! :D
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Tsurtsurel12 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2011
Okay,then how about,hmm,he sorta bursts out and acts "steamy"(I noticed you guys preffer to use the term steamy rather than-okay I'll stop here)
Don't ask why or how,but I blurted that at the spur of the moment.So,yeah....Meh.
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animexgodchild Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011
AHH! That was awesomeness! Oh my goodness, this reminds me of something I would do! I am not into that whole entire, figure your feeling sout and everything!

That was awesomeness writing! I totally love it! :)
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nixcoo Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011   Writer
Hahahah! Wait, lemme get this straight: you would act like Nicky in this situation? Oh ho ho ho - that is sort of hawt. Too bad im taken :D

Thanks for enjoying the read! :hug:
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animexgodchild Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2011
Haha. Whoops! Nah, I meant Dawn's situation, but okay!

Anytime! Totally awesome writing!
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JuJukins Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
GAH CLIFFHANGERRRRRR...!
But hawt.
I think I think I think that she should try to get away, but then accidentally hurt his injuries, and then feel really guilty and stay and then they should have sex kiss and make up.
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JuJukins Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Also I love his POV LIKE A LOT.
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nixcoo Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011   Writer
Yeshhhhh glad you enjoyed Nicky's perverted thoughts. Haha!
Thanks for the idea though, I am leaning forward to an idea where Dawn hurts Nicky - be it accidental or on purpose. Hahah. The making up part sounds cute too.. Hmmm *racks brain for creative idea*
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JuJukins Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
I always enjoy perverted thoughts, as I am not-so-secretly a total perv lol.
I'm hoping it's accidental. Or like, she hits him but WAY HARDER THAN SHE MEANT TO. Or something.
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freespiritkrr Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011
Mwahahaha I knew it!

Damn, I was sitting on the edge of my seat with my nose practically on the screen for the last half! That was really good perspective and you got the language just right - no trips in diction or consciousness from Nicky! =D
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nixcoo Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011   Writer
Haha thank you! I'm happy you appreciate Nicky's transparent emotions when it comes to these situations! I thought it was a lil bit too over-the-top, but that's how I like Nicky to be! :D
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freespiritkrr Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011
Oh, and thank you also for replying! I respond to every fav or comment I get because I appreciate it and I love it when the artists & authors comment back =D
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freespiritkrr Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011
You're quite welcome of course!

My appreciation partially stems from my desire to see more guys actually show what they feel (granted it's an equal thing: girls could be more observant and guys could be more expressive), but that's a long story and I won't get into it. Heck, some girls could actually say what they mean - anyways, I like a little over-the-top-ness sometimes and it totally suits Nicky's characters. You can tell he jokes around a lot but he's got that serious/apprehensive/nervous side that comes out both when he's needed by others to be as such and other times too when it's not necessarily warranted. To me it takes him a step off from being that guy who is constantly joking and never/rarely serious (pains in the butt as bf's lemme tell ya).

I donno. Maybe Kichi and I are saying to much (my responses are long too) but as a fellow writer I like getting into the character's head. I just appreciate the way you portray them.

Aaaand now I'm blabbering again xD Thanks for sharing your work; we love your partnership with Kai! <3
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SNEEDHAM507 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011
uhhhh la la! Check this out [link] :iconftw:
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nixcoo Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011   Writer
LOL Sarah's boobs are disturbing me.
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SNEEDHAM507 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011
disturbingly hot!!
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nixcoo Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011   Writer
If you like them melons. :P
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SNEEDHAM507 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011
Duhhhj
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Cherries-are-evil Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2011
course you'd link a shower scene.. hehe
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SNEEDHAM507 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2011
R U not pleased!?!?!
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Cherries-are-evil Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2011
with teh shower scene?

I like shower scenes.. when its censored XD
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SNEEDHAM507 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2011
well then....Grow up!!!
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Cherries-are-evil Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2011
Hehe XD
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SNEEDHAM507 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2011
onto the pron!!!
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NinjaChef673 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug:
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nixcoo Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011   Writer
Hope you enjoyed it! :huggle:
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NinjaChef673 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh I did ... you're a tease, but its not so much of a tease if you compare it to Dawn's story, but still

<3 u for it lol hope you're not working too hard :)
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fuu-chann Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011  Student Artisan Crafter
OMG McSneed xD. I seriously lol'd when I read that part.
Nicky is too cute x)
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nixcoo Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011   Writer
Hehehe, I'm glad you found it entertaining! :love:
Thanks!
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Terrara-antaria Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011
Absolutely loved the tension!!! But I think at that point Dawn should smack him down :D Sorry Nicky
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nixcoo Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011   Writer
Oooooh, Dawn smacking Nicky? I'm liking this idea very very much :D
He deserves it, so dun be sorry, hahah!
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Enderkichi Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011
I.LOVE.YOU. God I needed to read this... I love Nicky! He is just so... so open and intense on his feelings

"He ignored his Rylie-shaped conscience that was nagging about getting more rest."
Lol I giggled as I imagined that just like how it happens in cartoons xDDD

Nicky is burning with the flames of passion!!! *0* lol I love how he has all of Dawn's features memorized, it really shows just how much he cares about her, and the part about wanting to wake up next to her, that was really sweet :iconiloveyouplz:

Gosh so much ST but it's good they stopped... unwillingly on Nick's side nonetheless xDDD
I will think about different continuations for this... for some reason Im leaning towards some drama or angst... i don't know... lol i'll whip up something and show you later... *evil grin*

~K1
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nixcoo Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011   Writer
Hahaha, this is just Nicky-overloaded. I wouldn't normally post things like this, because the perspective is one-sided. I enjoy stories where the scenes are told how it is, and the readers get to interpret them.

But anyhow, I wrote this when I needed to get off some steam... from stress of course :D

Anyhow, I love Nicky's raw passion too, although I am a lil embarrassed to write it out. Hahaha. But that is how he is: blunt, adorable and slightly perverted. Hehehe! I'm really happy you enjoyed this!
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Enderkichi Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2011
Sometimes one side stories are the best for showing a character in real depth
because they allow you to see through the eyes of the character and feel as s/he is feeling etc.
It makes room for the reader to become acquainted and feel connected to a character.
Doing one side stories once in a while is good xD

"But anyhow, I wrote this when I needed to get off some steam... from stress of course" ....of course :iconhurrplz:

Hahaha that happens to me all the time!! That's why it's so hard to write yaoi... especially whe you have to include citrus in it... I get too embarassed! xD
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freespiritkrr Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011
I agree - it's an awesome balance of sweetness and passion from Nicky =3
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Enderkichi Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011
you think so too!? xD So... are you like... a big fan of Nicky or something? huh huh
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freespiritkrr Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011
What!? *looks around with shifty eyes* I-I-

I am! He may be fiction but he's an example of the rare funny nice guy. Most of the funny guys I meet have to come with an "I'm an asshole but you're going to forgive me because I'm funny" package x_x It's like boys hear some girls just want the nice guy and perhaps the boys think "oh, that means I have to be all sanitized" - where as this pov of a funny nice guy *coughNickycough* shows that "nice guy" isn't an extreme). Let's put it this way: Nicky's a breath of much-desired fresh air (and I the Nixcoo + Kai-isolated partnership) =D

Aaaaand now I'm sure I'm blabbering too much ^^;
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Enderkichi Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2011
doooooood i totally agree with you!!! and no, you're not blabbering, it's a perfectly normal and healthy conversation xDDD

I love Nicky too, from all the characters he is my favorite! >.D
And i do agree Nix and Kai make an awesome team.
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freespiritkrr Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2011
xD Awesome! *fist pump* I think it's kinda cute how Ry is kinda the Mr. Grumpy Pants and I love how caring Rylie is, and of course then you have the "challenger/dark" pair who are cool (I like a little bit of a challenge), but of the guys I like Nicky~ Of the girls, I'm not sure yet. I wanna read more before I decide. So far it's a tie between all three of them - still x_x There's just something about Nicky that pulls at your heart strings.

I really appreciate Nix and Kai's work and them paired amplifies the characters they share. I'd love to get together with one of my friends and do it for fun one day =D
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